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Re: Arabeyes Gitex presentation
- To: core at arabeyes dot org
- Subject: Re: Arabeyes Gitex presentation
- From: Nadim Shaikli <shaikli at yahoo dot com>
- Date: Sat, 18 Oct 2003 00:12:03 -0700 (PDT)
--- Mohammed Elzubeir <elzubeir at arabeyes dot org> wrote:
> Here is what I have of a draft for the presentation. Take a look and let
> me know your thoughts.
>
> I still didn't add the screenshots (and had some issues with adding
> images with openoffice).
>
> URL: http://www.arabeyes.org/~elzubeir/gitex-2003.sxi.bz2 [Oo file]
> URL: http://www.arabeyes.org/~elzubeir/gitex-2003.pdf.bz2 [PDF]
I looked at the PDF and here are my comments (listed by page number),
2.
+ Most pages have too much whitespace - the line spacing seems to be
too liberal for my taste and seem artificially to be spread-apart.
You might be using 1.5 or 2.0 for spacing instead of the normal 1.0
+ 2nd bullet - s/the/virtually all applications'
+ Add new bullet at end - It's knowing you are secure without blind
trust/belief
3.
+ Make 4th bullet be 3rd
+ s/House/Build
+ s/tap into/benefit from via a nurturing environment
+ s/propel/encourage
+ s/technical industry/bleeding-edge technology driven industry
4.
+ s/focus/focus and resources
+ substitute "what is" with "what/who is"
+ replace 5th bullet with
"Formed a focused plan/roadmap with means to attain and gauge its goals"
5.
+ Put current 2nd bullet below the current 4th (which starts with bandwidth)
+ s/Feet/Desk
+ replace "(TM)" with true trade-mark symbol (correct size and upperscore)
+ sub "their time" with "their time/effort/resources"
+ Remove last bullet about meeting
+ Add,
"Are looking into solidifying professional 5+ year commitment"
6.
+ Add as a second bullet
"Meetings are held online on IRC (Internet Relay Chat)"
+ s/meetings open/meetings are open/
7.
+ first major bullet should be
"Arabian Computer News (ACN - ITP.net)"
+ second major bullet should be
"Middle East Networking (ITP.net)"
+ Include all the article names and dates below each major heading, those
articles are noted in our about page. So for ACN, you would have
" - Jan 15, 2003: Lack of awareness holds back Linux"
" - Jan 08, 2003: Linux Enterprise Ready"
" - Jul 16, 2002: Pushing The Penguin"
etc
+ Include a major bullet as "Television Media"
+ Under TV include,
" - May 17, 2002: Abu Dhabi TV"
" - May 11, 2002: Al-Jazeera Satellite TV"
8.
+ Change title to "Arabeyes' Project Types"
+ Exchange location of Internal and external sub-bullets. You will talk
later about them in "external" then "internal" order, so have 'em be in
that order here as well.
+ sub "Fonts project" with "Fonts/Art Projects"
9.
+ Include all number of approx terms on each project - like Gnome/KDE as
" GNOME, KDE ( 13,000/41000 & 31,000/79,000)"
etc
+ s/->/-to-
+ Last sub-bullet should be
"World's first open source "Wordlist" (ver 0.5) (86,000/129,000)
NOTE: make sure the parenthesis line-up so it looks nice.
10.
+ s/Extend/Extend Arabic/
+ s/persual filter/pager/
+ s/crt/CRT/
11.
+ s/application/applications/
+ move last bullet (number 5) to be before last (ie. make it be bullet #4)
12.
+ s/A tool to allow for/Allows/
+ s/for initial installation/as initial installation medium/
13.
+ title - s/Live CD/Live-CD/
+ s/Arabic Linux/World's first Arabic Linux/
+ last bullet should be,
"Showcases many of Arabeyes' applications, documents and principles"
+ add
"Intended to spark wider range of interest about Open Source and Arabeyes"
+ add
"Intended to show and cement 'can be done' attitude"
14.
+ add
"Intended to provide a means to interpolate Arabic equations into graphs"
15.
+ s/written in/written and prototyped in/
16.
+ s/system./system/
17.
+ s/Bidi/Bidirectionality (Bidi)
+ add
"Includes various integrated tools - formating/printing/spell-checking/etc"
20.
+ Make line starting with "Salvage" be a sub-bullet under the bullet which
starts as "Create central"
+ On line with "Create central" s/open/open-sourced/
+ add another sub-bullet under "Create central"
"Nurture required skill-set and establish know-how"
21.
+ replace sub-bullet starting with "Distros support" with
"Distribution support level (to influence RedHat/Mandrake/Debian/Suse, etc)
22.
+ Before each sub-bullet add
"Addressed to "
23.
+ on 3rd sub-bullet (which starts with "impress upon") add at end
" (presentations, seminars, courses, research projects, etc)"
24.
+ This page needs to be as follows
- Linux User Groups (LUG)
= www.linux.org.sa
= www.linux-egypt.org
= Start one in your area !
- www.linux4arab.org
- www.arabiclinux.com
- www.linux.org
- www.linuxtoday.com
- We want to hear from _YOU_ on www.arabeyes.org
Make sure to spell-check everything and make sure to upload the final
PDF and editable version to our webpages upon completion to be part of
our 'about' page.
Hope this helps; Salam.
- Nadim
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