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Re: Arabeyes Gitex presentation
- To: core at arabeyes dot org
- Subject: Re: Arabeyes Gitex presentation
- From: Nadim Shaikli <shaikli at yahoo dot com>
- Date: Sat, 18 Oct 2003 00:12:03 -0700 (PDT)
--- Mohammed Elzubeir <elzubeir at arabeyes dot org> wrote:
> Here is what I have of a draft for the presentation. Take a look and let
> me know your thoughts.
> I still didn't add the screenshots (and had some issues with adding
> images with openoffice).
> URL: http://www.arabeyes.org/~elzubeir/gitex-2003.sxi.bz2 [Oo file]
> URL: http://www.arabeyes.org/~elzubeir/gitex-2003.pdf.bz2 [PDF]
I looked at the PDF and here are my comments (listed by page number),
+ Most pages have too much whitespace - the line spacing seems to be
too liberal for my taste and seem artificially to be spread-apart.
You might be using 1.5 or 2.0 for spacing instead of the normal 1.0
+ 2nd bullet - s/the/virtually all applications'
+ Add new bullet at end - It's knowing you are secure without blind
+ Make 4th bullet be 3rd
+ s/tap into/benefit from via a nurturing environment
+ s/technical industry/bleeding-edge technology driven industry
+ s/focus/focus and resources
+ substitute "what is" with "what/who is"
+ replace 5th bullet with
"Formed a focused plan/roadmap with means to attain and gauge its goals"
+ Put current 2nd bullet below the current 4th (which starts with bandwidth)
+ replace "(TM)" with true trade-mark symbol (correct size and upperscore)
+ sub "their time" with "their time/effort/resources"
+ Remove last bullet about meeting
"Are looking into solidifying professional 5+ year commitment"
+ Add as a second bullet
"Meetings are held online on IRC (Internet Relay Chat)"
+ s/meetings open/meetings are open/
+ first major bullet should be
"Arabian Computer News (ACN - ITP.net)"
+ second major bullet should be
"Middle East Networking (ITP.net)"
+ Include all the article names and dates below each major heading, those
articles are noted in our about page. So for ACN, you would have
" - Jan 15, 2003: Lack of awareness holds back Linux"
" - Jan 08, 2003: Linux Enterprise Ready"
" - Jul 16, 2002: Pushing The Penguin"
+ Include a major bullet as "Television Media"
+ Under TV include,
" - May 17, 2002: Abu Dhabi TV"
" - May 11, 2002: Al-Jazeera Satellite TV"
+ Change title to "Arabeyes' Project Types"
+ Exchange location of Internal and external sub-bullets. You will talk
later about them in "external" then "internal" order, so have 'em be in
that order here as well.
+ sub "Fonts project" with "Fonts/Art Projects"
+ Include all number of approx terms on each project - like Gnome/KDE as
" GNOME, KDE ( 13,000/41000 & 31,000/79,000)"
+ Last sub-bullet should be
"World's first open source "Wordlist" (ver 0.5) (86,000/129,000)
NOTE: make sure the parenthesis line-up so it looks nice.
+ s/Extend/Extend Arabic/
+ s/persual filter/pager/
+ move last bullet (number 5) to be before last (ie. make it be bullet #4)
+ s/A tool to allow for/Allows/
+ s/for initial installation/as initial installation medium/
+ title - s/Live CD/Live-CD/
+ s/Arabic Linux/World's first Arabic Linux/
+ last bullet should be,
"Showcases many of Arabeyes' applications, documents and principles"
"Intended to spark wider range of interest about Open Source and Arabeyes"
"Intended to show and cement 'can be done' attitude"
"Intended to provide a means to interpolate Arabic equations into graphs"
+ s/written in/written and prototyped in/
+ s/Bidi/Bidirectionality (Bidi)
"Includes various integrated tools - formating/printing/spell-checking/etc"
+ Make line starting with "Salvage" be a sub-bullet under the bullet which
starts as "Create central"
+ On line with "Create central" s/open/open-sourced/
+ add another sub-bullet under "Create central"
"Nurture required skill-set and establish know-how"
+ replace sub-bullet starting with "Distros support" with
"Distribution support level (to influence RedHat/Mandrake/Debian/Suse, etc)
+ Before each sub-bullet add
"Addressed to "
+ on 3rd sub-bullet (which starts with "impress upon") add at end
" (presentations, seminars, courses, research projects, etc)"
+ This page needs to be as follows
- Linux User Groups (LUG)
= Start one in your area !
- We want to hear from _YOU_ on www.arabeyes.org
Make sure to spell-check everything and make sure to upload the final
PDF and editable version to our webpages upon completion to be part of
our 'about' page.
Hope this helps; Salam.
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